tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post5073717393261250863..comments2024-02-04T04:40:23.122-08:00Comments on Harlequin Heartwarming: Just, like, that...or how many crutches do you use? by Cheryl HarperPamela Tracyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05834270662017246137noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-17764728268128816312015-09-15T07:57:36.440-07:002015-09-15T07:57:36.440-07:00Look, glance, just, that...the list goes on. I cre...Look, glance, just, that...the list goes on. I created a Wordle once from a manuscript and JUST was in huge letters, and small letters, and in between letters. lol I also look for saw and heard. Just tell what they saw or heard, Patricia!Patricia Bradleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03382033674042021556noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-33084089791648701632015-09-15T05:33:25.645-07:002015-09-15T05:33:25.645-07:00Yes, "look" is such a tempting word!Yes, "look" is such a tempting word!<br />Cheryl Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16322884480241887224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-84718155880598903132015-09-14T18:14:53.527-07:002015-09-14T18:14:53.527-07:00So there with you! I remember saying that my 80K b...So there with you! I remember saying that my 80K book became a novella after I took out the word "look." Nice to know I'm not the only one.Liz Flahertyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06794565644883272260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-30873047740638197192015-09-14T18:13:13.615-07:002015-09-14T18:13:13.615-07:00Oh, funny, Muriel!
Oh, funny, Muriel!<br />Liz Flahertyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06794565644883272260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-85729661936000564062015-09-14T18:03:30.375-07:002015-09-14T18:03:30.375-07:00Thanks so much ladies. I hope it was okay to ask t...Thanks so much ladies. I hope it was okay to ask that question here. I was so curious about the word "again". Glad to know it's not forbidden to use it....no rules against using it. Laurie Ihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09393553707193848649noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-65842930258664140612015-09-14T16:04:55.871-07:002015-09-14T16:04:55.871-07:00Oh, yes. Showing and telling. The old battle! &quo...Oh, yes. Showing and telling. The old battle! "Look" is on my list and I hate to come to it because I know I'm going to be a while working and reworking.Cheryl Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16322884480241887224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-8349971759110333212015-09-14T16:03:46.875-07:002015-09-14T16:03:46.875-07:00Hi, Laurie! I don't think it's forbidden. ...Hi, Laurie! I don't think it's forbidden. Some writers' voices might work better with once more, but so many editors want to streamline sentences so again would be the better choice. This is really interesting, Laurie!Cheryl Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16322884480241887224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-42712257347227515532015-09-14T16:01:40.119-07:002015-09-14T16:01:40.119-07:00Like, like, like...I could use it in every sentenc...Like, like, like...I could use it in every sentence!Cheryl Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16322884480241887224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-32544765440275174872015-09-14T16:01:16.446-07:002015-09-14T16:01:16.446-07:00Yes. I thought I was so smart and deleted all the ...Yes. I thought I was so smart and deleted all the justs in one manuscript. Makes for some funny sentences now and then! Deleting is a constant battle. :)Cheryl Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16322884480241887224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-86682828173004425282015-09-14T16:00:12.609-07:002015-09-14T16:00:12.609-07:00I really am crazy about him.I really am crazy about him.Cheryl Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16322884480241887224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-41943983082651897992015-09-14T15:59:47.849-07:002015-09-14T15:59:47.849-07:00I get the same comment from Dana now and then. I l...I get the same comment from Dana now and then. I like to think that means I'm young at heart (aka, fooling myself).Cheryl Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16322884480241887224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-10172784429659189492015-09-14T15:58:58.413-07:002015-09-14T15:58:58.413-07:00Just ,must be the best word ever!Just ,must be the best word ever!Cheryl Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16322884480241887224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-9156088962457291762015-09-14T15:58:33.160-07:002015-09-14T15:58:33.160-07:00Oh, me, too. Two sentences and I've used the s...Oh, me, too. Two sentences and I've used the same word three different times.Cheryl Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16322884480241887224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-71715810081210310822015-09-14T15:57:49.963-07:002015-09-14T15:57:49.963-07:00Muriel, I understand completely! I was talking wit...Muriel, I understand completely! I was talking with Katherine at dinner while we were at RWA and mentioned my move to the country as a "total Green Acres episode." Then I had to ask if she knew what I meant. There are people in the world who've never watched Green Acres reruns...Cheryl Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16322884480241887224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-38410357707548238362015-09-14T15:55:32.360-07:002015-09-14T15:55:32.360-07:00You are so right. Editors are the best. You are so right. Editors are the best. Cheryl Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16322884480241887224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-12821214956785344892015-09-14T15:55:07.465-07:002015-09-14T15:55:07.465-07:00You are very welcome! I'm so glad other writer...You are very welcome! I'm so glad other writers have the same challenge.<br />And I will vow to show off Jack at every chance.Cheryl Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16322884480241887224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-62446834813807871332015-09-14T15:19:08.806-07:002015-09-14T15:19:08.806-07:00Also - back ,over, return, up, down and look. I te...Also - back ,over, return, up, down and look. I tend to repeat them over and over again in the same paragraph! (During the first draft.)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09144857256396400731noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-27547489367841960932015-09-14T12:32:21.546-07:002015-09-14T12:32:21.546-07:00I have issues with look and people nodding. Someti...I have issues with look and people nodding. Sometimes I think my characters' heads are going to break off from all the nodding they do! I've had to work hard to show what they're looking at rather than telling they looked. It's a constant battle. I feel you're pain :)Amy Vastinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10370234907973582544noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-46101525028349584332015-09-14T11:43:04.998-07:002015-09-14T11:43:04.998-07:00Maybe because the author used the word 'again&...Maybe because the author used the word 'again' within the last few pages in the book and wants to express the same meaning with a different sound. Editors are jangled when a word appears too many times too close together. Good to hear how things sound to you as a reader. You contribute a lot to this blog, Laurie.Muriel Jhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12065629068634892645noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-29677347883136056422015-09-14T10:41:02.935-07:002015-09-14T10:41:02.935-07:00Look at Jack!! ( :
This is very interesting to me...Look at Jack!! ( :<br />This is very interesting to me as a reader, and I have a question about a word that I almost never see written. I notice that writers often use the term "once more" instead of "again". Is there a reason for that? Sometimes I mentally insert the word "again' because I just ("just"...lol) think it sounds better or more natural. Is Laurie Ihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05251033150576051700noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-43299236656369095062015-09-14T09:12:34.564-07:002015-09-14T09:12:34.564-07:00I soooo want to, like, meet Jack! And you, too, of...I soooo want to, like, meet Jack! And you, too, of course, Cheryl! Love this post, because, well, it's soooo, like, on-target! LOL Have a beautiful week, m'dear!Loree Loughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16301137461076730218noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-79256505772148567462015-09-14T08:53:31.308-07:002015-09-14T08:53:31.308-07:00Jack is adorable. I am waiting for my list of word...Jack is adorable. I am waiting for my list of words but have recently been on a "had" deleting binge. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06813011012122814594noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-50001989800086838872015-09-14T08:46:01.350-07:002015-09-14T08:46:01.350-07:00I haven't been told YET which words I overuse,...I haven't been told YET which words I overuse, but I'm sure it a long list. Jack is adorable, Cheryl! I bet that nose is nice and wet. :)Jill Weatherholthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12935341991222337363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-78829600941891230922015-09-14T08:33:58.510-07:002015-09-14T08:33:58.510-07:00I hear you, Cheryl! "Feel" is one of my ...I hear you, Cheryl! "Feel" is one of my top offenders as well as "look" yikes... One thing editors comment on is how YA I sound and ask for more "adult" wording - ouch- but I am a YA writer so I get where they're coming from. Of course my current WIP is loaded with inner city, behaviorally challenged teens on a wilderness intervention so I got to indulge myself Karen Rockhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03621736343432643472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2442063056672240555.post-363092830003257162015-09-14T08:32:24.029-07:002015-09-14T08:32:24.029-07:00just, even, really-really - lol!just, even, really-really - lol!MelCurtishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07218278641168063613noreply@blogger.com